buried deep
in my subconscious
forms appear abstractly
.
rising from the
depths of mind
a snow lion
did find me
.
tongue lashing
claws thrashing
fiery hair
and face
.
in the clouds
of the
himalayas
.
a tibetan
holy place
.
.
songs of samsara
10 responses to “SNOW LION”
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I corrected that on my blog… haha
You got the original post in your email
I also made other revisions….🙏LikeLike
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I totally changed the poem ..and the word fierce is gone 🙂
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OK. I always do editing. This is crucial to any writer and I did SO MANY for Jonathan. Please don’t ever be embarrassed. All writers make such errors. Trying to avoid them only blocks creativity. In fact, Ray Bradbury had a famous quote for writers: “Don’t get it right, get it written.”
I always loved that quote.
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Ha… not embarrassed… it was actually pointed out to me on the AI analyzer i showed you ! I’m usually pretty good with spelling… but sometimes I slip up …
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Yeah, I get it. You seem more devoted to structure and spelling and editing than most writers. I like that. But I’d like your work even if you were a lot more careless. I’ve loved many carelessly written poems. I know that sound kinda nutty, but the works sometimes rise above the expeditious writing. I think that’s okay. I admit to being a little surprised when I see such poems published. Where were the editors who are supposed to catch mistakes???
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yes… speaking of careless/ carefree writing… I get really bored if something is too perfect…
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That’s a really good quote too !!!! SO TRUE
Most of my poems are just getting it out as I feel it first… sometimes I will edit… mostly I just leave it raw… it’s funny… but I can feel if the poem sounds off…but I think I mostly get it right the first time… at least I’m happy with it…..LikeLike
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Thank you Peter ♥️
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ZONGS OF ZAMZARA 
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